This will be short and sweet. I have a longer Harry Potter post coming soon!
Writing tip of the day: do you find yourself using the phrase “began to” in your action scenes? Consider these:
1. The noise got louder, and my heart began to thud harder.
2. When I saw they were chasing me, I began to run.
I see this kind of phrasing often as I edit. I think it’s partly a novice thing and partly a rough-draft thing. Whatever its origin, don’t do it. It’s clumsy and actually slows the action down. Consider the revisions:
1. The noise got louder, and my heart thudded in my chest.
2. When I saw they were chasing me, I ran.
Sure, there are times when it makes sense to use “began to,” but they aren’t as frequent as you’d think.
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